Perfect Family
When hear of family,
thinks of Sun and Earth.
Sun the husband star,
Earth his loving wiife.
Burns himself alive
provide energy for dears.
His way of running ,
a family so beloved.
Earth revolves him round ,
center of her life.
not bothered about
day or night or time.
Moon the child rotates,
the mother he adores.
By doing so he rounds,
the Sun,his father too.
Sun ,earth ,the moon,
a closeknit supermodel ,
an ideal small clear,
thinks of Sun and Earth.
Sun the husband star,
Earth his loving wiife.
Burns himself alive
provide energy for dears.
His way of running ,
a family so beloved.
Earth revolves him round ,
center of her life.
not bothered about
day or night or time.
Moon the child rotates,
the mother he adores.
By doing so he rounds,
the Sun,his father too.
Sun ,earth ,the moon,
a closeknit supermodel ,
an ideal small clear,
perfect great family .
Entered for Jingle's Poetry Potluck
Written for Poet's United's The Thursday Think Tank - #23 with prompt Family
22 comments:
What a wonderful and original way to describe a perfect family, I love this, so well done!
I love this...
The Sun, the moon....
A family...
Nice :)
Rashmi,
Superb take on the prompt. Ingenious.
What an inspired take on the prompt! Really original. I love the idea of the sun as the husband and earth as his devoted wife. Beautiful!
wow,
what a perfect entry,
love your idea of family.
interesting and original
Oh, I really like the way you have looked at family here. Sun, earth, and moon. What a perfect family indeed!
Rashmi,
A very different and interesting idea of family and the interaction between them.
An excellent poem....
Eileen :)
How neat to think of the Sun, Earth and the moon(s) as metaphor for family. I will be thinking about this now and will read it again. :)
Complexity imitates complexity, excellent work.
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Special awards for you. Happy Sunday! xx
Hope to see you at our potluck tonight.
a very beautiful take on a wonderful family :)
do drop by at Jingle Poetry, where your blog is the feature in our Tuesday Reviews segment :)
yes, i can relate to looking at family this way.
beautifully written words!
I'm glad i found you on Jingle
thank you
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This is a wonderful poem, Rashmi..I love the idea of a family being in harmony, like the Universe! A lovely notion...:)
I would love to have you in poets rally week 33.
let me know by leaving a link under my post.
Thanks a ton.
You are quite productive.
beautiful poem!
The cosmos as family :)
Nice work!
Happy Potluck!
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Link by link the family is built, influencig each other in special ways. The solar system, the universe, the cosmos all working in sync. Thank you for this delightful poem.
this is absolutely a lovely piece. i never looked at the nuclei family the way you do. good observation sumit!
Dear Rashmi
I enjoyed reading this one.. Thanks for sharing..
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Interesting analogy! :)
oh wooooow! amazingly clever analogy! great job :D
That's great entry for the week..
A++
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