Depression
Lack of words,
lack of thoughts,
lack of actions,
no reason to live.
None to talk,
none to hear,
none to say,
we need you.
Without a smile,
without a pat,
without a feel,
failure myself.
Feeling empty
feeling lost,
feeling waste,
is this depression?
Entered for Jingle's poetry potluck. -Moods, feelings and emotions!!
Lack of words,
lack of thoughts,
lack of actions,
no reason to live.
None to talk,
none to hear,
none to say,
we need you.
Without a smile,
without a pat,
without a feel,
failure myself.
Feeling empty
feeling lost,
feeling waste,
is this depression?
Entered for Jingle's poetry potluck. -Moods, feelings and emotions!!
13 comments:
Sounds like it to me! It is a place I do not miss.
I have to ask - is English you primary language? In reading your blog I wonder if your choice of words is meant to serve a certain poetic style or if it is your English. Either way, its a pleasure to read.
I thin ots so clever how you utilise tha fast pacing of this to illustrate the thoght racing through ones head. Top stuff.
And welcome to Poets United.
Herb Alyette
Thanks for reading J and Herb.
To J...No J English is not my primary language.I didnt choose my words for a poetic style..It just came like that.
maybe, just maybe..
This is sad and
you make me see depression in many ways.
beautiful word flow.
Thanks for sharing it with potluck.
A beautiful flow on such an intense self-introspection.
There is this raw feeling rippling through the verses that catches your attention ! liked this :)
stripped down emotion. i liked it. great job!
Yes this is depression, but sometimes, don't you think, depression make good fodder for writing poems?
Very emotional piece. A lot of people can probably sympathize and empathize because most of us have probably gone through this; feeling, worthless, and just hopeless. This is a simple poem, yet intense.
Ofcourse it is depression and your words convey that in a very strong way..I liked it. Thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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i hope you will leave depression as quickly as you entered....wonderful expression of feelings.
A very strong write. You placed yourself inside a mood for the purpose of a write and you did it flawlessly. Well done.
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